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    dots Submission Name: Take Me Backdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 757
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       This is to you Steve, please don't hate me, I wanna work this out, like I said, i wanna try talking.


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    dotsTake Me Backdots
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    I don't know what I expected from this
    another broken heart
    this pain has driven me away
    and we've never been farther apart

    I needed to feel the love
    but I was dead inside
    this excuse isn't much but you need to realize

    that I loved you
    this wasn't a lie
    and I still do
    if you would take me back




    Submitted on 2005-01-30 13:07:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you'll find someone who will love you the way that you have always wanted to be loved. Once you do you will know that nothing in the world can break you two apart. Just keep looking. He's out there somewhere. I promise. Keep that in mind. He may not be who you even expected it to be.
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by manda_bear | [ Reply to This ]
      kk, i think this is possibly a little cliché to be honest, although i for one still like it.

    its pure, and ive seen people do that, and a piece of writing means so much more to a person if they can relate in that way, its somewhat laking in imagery, but you werent going for that, just heart felt appoligy, and it works, well done

    best of you to you
    | Posted on 2005-01-30 00:00:00 | by ShadowHarlequin | [ Reply to This ]


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