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    dots Submission Name: The Better Companydots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
    Total Views: 776
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1043



    Description:
       For Matt.

    I had my first fight with Bonnie. Survived it.

    But I'm still convinced that Matt likes her. Not me.

    Never me.

    When will it be?

    [hannah, tell me whether i should give this to him or not.]


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    dotsThe Better Companydots
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    In your afterthoughts, I remain.
    The pat on my shoulder,
    after you embrace my best friend.
    The girl you agree to dance with
    after asking her first.
    Sheís prettier, taller,
    the better company youíre
    always searching for.
    Iím sorry that Iím emotional
    and I have to courage to fight you.
    Iím sorry that I donít
    laugh enough
    or flirt with you like she does.
    I just donít want to know how.
    I never learned to throw myself
    at your feet.
    But I would.
    If only I wasnít already
    sunk below my own body.
    Iím so low I donít think
    throwing myself below yours
    would do me any good.
    So if it must be that way,
    I will remain in your afterthoughts,
    pretend I'm still the better company.
    Iíll forget myself as the girl
    youíve known since you were twelve.
    Hope that my igonorance
    to flaunting myself
    doesnít effect your tolerance of me.





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    ||| Comments |||
      "I just don&#8217;t want to know how."
    I don't quite understand this line???

    "I&#8217;m so low I don&#8217;t think
    throwing myself below yours
    would do me any good."
    I think that 'yours' should be 'you'.

    Ummmmm... I don't know if you should or not. Honestly, I'm about to give up on the whole "girl tell guy she likes him before he says anything about liking her" thing, cause it never seems to do us girls any good. I know what it's like to watch a guy you like practically worship the ground that another girl walks on, friend and aquaintance. I think you are going to have to decide for yourself, but I would be more than happy to talk to you at length about it all, cause I know that talking helps me see things clearer. Call my house or my cell. Love you so much girl! See ya tomorrow night!
    | Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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