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    dots Submission Name: "BURN IT DOWN"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       This isnt who I am at all, I just like to write about things that I know I will never experience.....WELL...MAYBE,...NEVER!.............~m


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    dots"BURN IT DOWN"dots
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    One lone match.
    Hoping for the flame to catch.
    I crave an ignited fire.
    And watch it grow is both our desires.
    It's a fuckin game.
    I've grown insanely close to the flame.
    Together we rage.
    Spreading our message of pain.
    For they are the firefighters.
    I am the fire ignighter.
    Watch them pour the water.
    As parents cry over death of their daughter.
    People gather, it attracts.
    The star is me and my match.
    These are confessions-
    of a pyromaniac.....~L.t
    ----I/I---------!---------I<---------I=------------------------------





    Submitted on 2005-01-31 01:34:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So this is more of that axe murderer type I saw in "For the [censored]es I loved before". lol you're one crazy thinkning guy. I like this a lot though it's an awesome style of writing and probably a great stress relief poem for you, I feel some cool emotions from this, the rhyming was nicely done. Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a peculiar bit of work. It seemed as though the rhyme scheme was a little forced but I got a decent mental picture in my mind. I think there were a few small spelling errors that you could find if you ran it through a word processor, also, for the future try breaking up your work into set stanzas, not saying there's anything wrong with this but I want to see what you can do with that format with either free verse or regimented rhyme scheme. Welcome to the site. -Kenji
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty neat. It reminds me of a story I heard about a troubled kid who attemted suicide by burning himself alive with gas. Well he lived. Now he is a motivational speaker for troubled or suicidal kids. Perhaps if he had chosen to write something like this he wouldn't have felt the need to do such a thing. I tell ya though, it made him an honest person. So your piece is good, I know what its like to fantasize about things like this. Fantasy is what keeps reality humble. You know. -sin
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]


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