Description: This isnt who I am at all, I just like to write about things that I know I will never experience.....WELL...MAYBE,...NEVER!.............~m
"BURN IT DOWN" -------------------------------------------
One lone match.
Hoping for the flame to catch.
I crave an ignited fire.
And watch it grow is both our desires.
It's a fuckin game.
I've grown insanely close to the flame.
Together we rage.
Spreading our message of pain.
For they are the firefighters.
I am the fire ignighter.
Watch them pour the water.
As parents cry over death of their daughter.
People gather, it attracts.
The star is me and my match.
These are confessions-
of a pyromaniac.....~L.t
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So this is more of that axe murderer type I saw in "For the [censored]es I loved before". lol you're one crazy thinkning guy. I like this a lot though it's an awesome style of writing and probably a great stress relief poem for you, I feel some cool emotions from this, the rhyming was nicely done. Good write.
It was a peculiar bit of work. It seemed as though the rhyme scheme was a little forced but I got a decent mental picture in my mind. I think there were a few small spelling errors that you could find if you ran it through a word processor, also, for the future try breaking up your work into set stanzas, not saying there's anything wrong with this but I want to see what you can do with that format with either free verse or regimented rhyme scheme. Welcome to the site. -Kenji
This is pretty neat. It reminds me of a story I heard about a troubled kid who attemted suicide by burning himself alive with gas. Well he lived. Now he is a motivational speaker for troubled or suicidal kids. Perhaps if he had chosen to write something like this he wouldn't have felt the need to do such a thing. I tell ya though, it made him an honest person. So your piece is good, I know what its like to fantasize about things like this. Fantasy is what keeps reality humble. You know. -sin
Submission Name: "BURN IT DOWN"
