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    dots Submission Name: Amadots
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    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       "Burn my knees and
    Burn my knees and pray.
    Get up,
    Get up,
    Get up,
    Get up....
    Won't you stop my pain?"

    Emotion Sickness, Silverchair


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    dotsAmadots
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    For a little while,
    It seemed that I had stumbled upon innocence
    In it's newest, purest form.

    Like a tiny beacon of hope she glowed inside me,
    The tainted vessel that I am.
    She was my immaculate conception
    Conceived through the convergence of two lost souls
    Each searching for something
    Some form of peace or understanding
    Or maybe love.

    The wishful me whispered wild wonders
    In the coolness of the hushed night
    By the light of the moon
    I caressed her
    Knowing that this pureness was transient
    But hoping it would last long enough to set me free

    But as soon as I'd grown attached to my hope
    She dissolved in a sea of red
    Forever lost--
    Or at least, lost for now.

    I spent a whole night
    Wishing that I could weep her loss
    But I was too far gone
    I lost my innocence twice
    This is my second stolen pearl
    And yet, I couldn't shed one single tear
    I guess I was a little too empty.

    Though she is gone,
    Her spirit lingers in my thoughts
    My flower that will never fade
    My Amarante.




    Submitted on 2005-01-31 16:32:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How precious the life forms of innocence, You captured this very well. Whilst I read your poetry I was taken on a ride of I soppose innocence. I was content and happy for this ride. I really enjoy your style of writting or maybe it's the feelings I fed off of. Thank you for sharing with all how precious life really is. I am sure those who read will have to agree. Once again thank you



    Sincerly Gannondalf aka Big Bear
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really beautiful. the tiny spark of hope that lives inside that we try to hold on to, but sometimes we just can't sustain it. it's tragic and heartbreaking, but at the end there is still that tiny spark that does not fully extinguish, and that is what keeps you going. very nice.
    | Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      konichiwa wow that poem is worthy of atreyu killswitch or avenged seven fold! i can understand to an extent for i have lost but it was my own doing and i will die inside knowing this.
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by wolfwoodphreak | [ Reply to This ]


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