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    dots Submission Name: youdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 688
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    dotsyoudots
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    Thinking about your beauty
    makes me so weak and I cant speak
    your my antidote
    It's been a week since
    I hit my last peek
    so follow this beat
    thinking about your beauty
    makes me so weak and I cant speak
    we where in the heat of the moment
    we thought it was so neat
    in till we had a scare
    about having kid
    It's fair for me to be scared
    what I did was a evil deed
    what I need is to be man
    and stand up
    and take responsibilities they come.




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