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    dots Submission Name: razors (revised)dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    This razor owns me
    Iím a teen age fiene
    slitting my wrist so fast
    the blood is still blue when it hits the ground
    Iím not proud at all
    but it relieves my pain
    yet, Iím still checking my pulse
    Iíve hit rock bottom
    running away
    trying to drink all my problems away
    I just wish I could fly away
    yet, I stay here
    slitting my wrist so fast
    the blood is still blue when it hits the ground
    this razor owns me
    getting chased bye the cops
    getting shot bye the tazers
    some times I feel possessed and
    I can't control what I do
    sitting in my room
    slitting my wrist so fast
    the blood is still blue when it hits the ground
    this razor owns me
    and I can't do anything about it
    some one rescue me please.




    Submitted on 2005-01-31 18:57:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its a good poem, i like how its free verse yet you still repeat some rhymes, however it seems to me a bit simplistic, unless you wanted it to be that way. good write, keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by throughmyvoice | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very sad poem! i cut myself sometimes2! if u need someone to talk to my AIM sn is RPprincess91! this was good! good job!
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i know how you feel... i used to cut but not as much anymore... i hope you do get help... believe me... it works

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    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by shattered_dream | [ Reply to This ]
      If I could rescue you I would. I know what this is like and I need rescueing...but I think the only person that can save us is ourselves...the only person that can stop is you...someone may be able to help but utimatley...you have to make yourself stop. I know how it feels like it's controling you...and very hard to not give in...I don't know what else to say to try and help...I hope things turn out okay...well...about the poem...This is a very sad subject...but a wonderful poem. I like how you repeated things..it flows well...I really like it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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