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Liar


Author: Akai_Ame
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It was a Project my english teaher made us do and since i haven't posted in a while i thought i would put it up. It isn't due yet and any help would be nice.


Liar



If you've never been a liar.
you don't know what it's like
To act so sure, so very wise
To wear fake smiles
That hide the lies
That only lurk behind your eyes.

you don't know what it's like
To tell a fib that's tiny
That grew everytime you spoke.
One that turned your little made-up world
Into a great joke.

you don't know the feeling
To be so full of guilt and shame
When all you have is yourelf to blame.

If you've never been a liar
You don't know what it's like
to have two faces.
One that the world looks at
The other no one ever sees.
For the world looks at the smile
and believes it to be true.
Never accepting what is the real you.




Submitted on 2005-01-31 19:57:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's very cute. It isn't an oftenn used topic but I've seen things similar. Reminds me of the song "Behind Blue Eyes". I like how it shows a little more substance when it brings in the idea of hiding yourself from the world.
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Lady Ankou | [ Reply to This ]
  this was pretty good and a little depressing. i think, as many aouthors do, you may have drawn from your personal experience. this is pretty good though
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by buffaloman | [ Reply to This ]
  Yup i am sorry that someone lied to you, but everybody have faced same problem, i think this one represent all hattered and detest when we were betrayed and fooled. This one also have a good rhyme, i enjoy reading it. Keep it up.

-garnet4david-
| Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
  I see, so essentially this work is more indicative of a depressed interior while hiding the signs with a simple smile. Your words only amplifying the lie as you assure everyone that you are okay and that nothing horrible is going on. You feel as though you are doomed to live the lie because there is nothing to help you to avoid lying more often seeing as how it works to avoid leading others to suspect and care for your inner pains.
| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this is really good and I don't say this often without things to change,which means I don't see anything wrong with it at all,it's great.
| Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by ColdinSummer | [ Reply to This ]


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