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    dots Submission Name: self-righteousdots
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    Author: wildchild
    ASL Info:    19/f/northwest
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 307/268/27
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       i'm tired of being preached to...


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    I'm tired of the self-righteous
    with their high heads,
    proud eyes and stiff necks

    They look to other punctures,
    not noticing their gaping wounds
    Not caring of their own blood

    Speaking out to me,
    telling me of all my woes
    offering double-bladed words

    Telling me to change my ways
    watching my path,
    measuring my steps

    But I like my dark mind
    with all it's little corners
    and secret boxes

    It's always an adventure
    just beyond the far wall,
    lurks the unknown

    Hang the self-righteous,
    air out their words
    and root up their hypocrisies

    People do not need chains,
    break the iron shackles
    and live a life, free of judgment and shame.




    Submitted on 2005-01-31 20:09:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That sounds like a lot of people Iv known in my life time Totaly strikes a cord you know that tight turning in your gut. well............... what am I saying?
    you wrote it. Its good Joshua
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by ooononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      It's nice to see that when people piss you off you produce work of this calibre! I like the message behind it that people shouldn't be put down by self rightous [censored]s. Cozy in a strange way!
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by irvine_valentin | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah! I love this! Very good job! Bah! Were you just given a lecture by some self-righteous person or just plain tired of everyone being so self-righteous a sh*t like that?

    Joqer
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Joqer | [ Reply to This ]
      People do not need chains,
    break the iron shackles
    and live a life, free of judgment and shame.

    How original of me, starting out a comment using YOUR WORKS. Heh, anyway, I thought it was very well done, you did a good job purveying those high nosed, tight lipped, "know"-it-alls. Stayed on track and acomplished, well I think, what you meant to get across.

    It was a pleasure, Bonnie
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a great piece- i liked it a whole lot. in fact, i just recently wrote a piece a lot like it called "Be Careful" that i posted a week or so ago. This piece hits very close to home. I loved the way you likened lies to double bladed words- i thought that was most creative. great work here.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this piece. i love the wording i love the meaning and thought thats behind it . i can feel the anger if this poem. it draws you in, ill be adding you to my fav list, good job!
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by gypsy83 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hang the self-righteous,
    air out their words
    and root up their hypocrisies

    My fave lines ...
    I really enjoyed this ...I would actually like to stamp it onto my friends forehead ...who seem to want to put everyone into a round hole ...and does see that some people are square...or octagonal (like me) ...
    Anywayyy ...I can sense your frustration in this peice and i pretty much know what you mean ...Good job ...You can feel the anger in this ...
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      It's alright. Who pissed you off this time?
    An error, but very easily fixed:
    and life a life, free of judgment and shame.
    The first life should live.
    I'm not sure I stayed with you all the way, but I got your point. It seemed as if you wondered a little, but it might have just been me.
    Good write.

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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