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    Author: dublhelix
    ASL Info:    18/m/perth australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 43/36/15
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 242
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       just a poem i wrote.....ideas people?


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    "sees me now, she walks down the road,
    effects a careful smmetry, a peace of mind
    that seems..so poingnat in its effect,
    for effect it brings, its veiw becalms
    as excellence becalms the eye.....
    like da vinci, renior...to veiw the sight
    is calm befalls the mind....as she to me..

    i speak "where goest thou..."
    or word to that effect, for seeming comes hard
    when the mind is baffled with images
    of past and present, future shock a possible text...
    however, alas, she mesures up, a tally over head and mind
    and lacking, seeming grace and wit, dismiss the thorn from edens side...
    walking down the road....alone...
    yet another challenge i must atone...





    Submitted on 2005-02-01 07:14:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm going to comment because no one elase has. I have read it a couple of times and I dont yet feel I understand it. I know how hard it is to title something that doesn't have a title in your own mind but maybe this is needed as a point of reference forr this type of strem of consciousness writing. I think I would really like that style of writing if it told a story in little snatches of thought to which this is achieved to some extent. I really like that style despite it being hard to follow Because it is so different from any poetry I have ever seen before. If you are modelling of anyone I would love to know the writers name. I must admit I don't like the the use of the word poignant not exactly sure why maybe because it is stating the obvious we generally only write poetry on poignant moments in our life, maybe. there is lots of allusions in this peice and I'm not really familiar with all of them so I will definately have to come back and read it at a later date. intrigued Jeannine
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Lafferty | [ Reply to This ]



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