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    dots Submission Name: Blood is thicker than water.dots
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    Author: Broken Dreams
    ASL Info:    16 female Wales
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 116/135/31
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
    Total Views: 324
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 535



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       Its a bloody mess hahahahaha.


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    dotsBlood is thicker than water.dots
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    I can see it,
    I can feel it,
    It’s dripping,
    Flowing, pooling,
    On my body,
    It seeps out of my orifices,
    Thick and luxurious,
    Blood is thicker than water,
    Easier to drown in,
    But I’m invincible,
    I’ll always be fine,
    I can slash my wrists,
    But I can’t wash it away,
    Blood is thicker than water,
    I can cry watery tears,
    Do they mean anything?
    I’ll be alright - until I cry blood,
    Blood is thicker than water.




    Submitted on 2005-02-01 08:51:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Fairly good. Although vampires arn't invincible... All together it's ok. Try putting a little more effort in the emotions and such. Just my personal thoughts..
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by No_purpose | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...I like to think of happy thoughts, but considering, I really like it. It's shiny. G'write. Thank you for commenting on my poem.
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by brassmonkey2009 | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno, this just seems maliciously violent for no reason. I mean, I don't find the overall idea of a cutting/mutilation poem so disturbing that it shouldn't be created or anything but it's still gotta have some specific purpose...
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      I will say this as well though (in response to No_purpose's comment) that even though yes, vampires aren't completely invincible, this poem does do a good job of getting the point across at how cocky they've stereotypically appeared to be in various forms of media.
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]



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