Description: Just woke up this morning with intentions of writing, this is what I got out of them..,
Never Ends -------------------------------------------
Drops of blood leak from my heart
as puddles of tears drip towards our part.
I miss you darling
touch tender kisses
as the razor blade embelishes in my vulnerability.
A rythmic beat jumps across my chest
I see your image, always at your best
I hear your forgotten laugh
while the blade penetrates
my eyes tightly closed
the needle and burning, easily bait.
Remembering your smile
and the names you'd call me
More than love, I hate
You, who pained my time well spent
You, who murdered my soul less content.
And here I sit, at the river end
watching my blood trickle and descend.
Seeing those eyes and hands
seeing them fade,
as the water begins to near
and my body I cannot feel.
Opening my eyes of jade
one last good bye
as I drowned
you watched over me
all the way down.
This is a very good poem. Very sad indeed and speaks of heartbreak so very well! It also captures the classic love/hate feelings very well. It is amazing how powerful our emotions and feelings can be and especially when someone steals your heart. The love is awesome but if it ever ends, it is painfully devestating. This one says to me that even though he knew you were hurting, he did nothing but let it happen. A very heartfelt and sad poem indeed. Good imagery throughout this poem. You really allow the reader to become involved with what you are saying. Very well done. Take care.
Very sad but written absolutely beautifully You showed incredible imagery in this poem I really felt like I was there with her at the moment she commited suicide It really captured a nerve Please continue to write as your poems are very powerful with true real meaning Take Care Ron
Please if you have a chance take a look at some of my poems and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
that's the kind of piece that leaves people speechless...honestly it did. i can't wait to read more of your writings. this one just made me go gasp and left me wanting more. awesome write
crazy awesome, do i have to say more? well i guess i do, since the computer wont let me post this cause its too short. ok, the rhyming was awesome, it didnt seem forced or uncomfortable at all. i loved the ending, but it was what lead up to the very end that made it beautiful. nice job!
Submission Name: Never Ends
, its sad but i like it, it seems to catch my atention quite well, i hope to read more of this sort of thing from u, great job and keep it up :D