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Just One Night

Author: xtremegentleman
ASL Info:    22/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595 /778 /82
Words: 293
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
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you know how you just fall for a woman instantly and want to do everything with her to the point you fantasize about it? Well, if not "Dude be wanting to get freaky sometimes". Welcome to the "Greatest Show on Earth"

Just One Night

All I need is one night alone with you
Four hours of love songs, a movie and fine wine to soothe me.
Baby I've got plans to light candlelight as we dance
As we ignite the lovely fire of romance

Perhaps we can advance to a level never reached
I'll push it so deep that you'll moan and never speak
Forever leak that fluid that comes from the influence of loving
When you scream "Oh baby, I'm coming"

And I'm drumming, beating it. Loving it so I'm keeping it
Keeping fit, I stay strong, baby I'll sleep in it
Your so thick! I feel your breast caressing my chest
As you look me in the eyes before you say I'm the best

And all the while, i'm kissing you on your neck
Feeling so good, it doesn't matter if I'm kissing your sweat
Cause you're wet and then next take a breath and express
That you sex like a vet and then I'll holler out yes

But No! Don't stop! The passion is so hot
Let me groove inside your slot as I play with your props
Driving and hitting corners and swerving becasue I'm drunk
Trying to take my vehicle all the way to your trunk...

...And pop it! Baby, I want to fill in the blanks
So that you still feel the pleasure even when you just think
Slow down and slow motion while I sip on this drink
Staring passionatley in your eyes without a moment to blink.

(Breathe) Baby, I swear the love is so right
I'm dreaming of the moment that my bait gets your bite
Yes, I can change your whole life
In the passion of just one night...just one night

Submitted on 2005-02-01 11:10:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like I like, looks like you got every girl who read this poem melting. Well, it is a very interesting poem, makes a girl think what more can a brotha do??????? i hope u can back up your words, n if u can, shiiiiiit all the power to you, n TAKE THAT TRIP TO NY! lol jus playin. keep doin ya thang cuz u doin it well,
ps: I read it cuz u said "please", freaky and sweet? Good Lawd...
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by JADE | [ Reply to This ]
  quite the confident brotha u are especially with the line "As you look me in the eyes before you say I'm the best".
I liked the racy feel i got when reading this quite explicit poem. Gosh you sound like the guy very girl should have locked away in her cupboard and only bring out to play at certain moments. I'm just such a suker 4 kinkyness. Do me a Fav and plz plz check out "Themba: Just Lay Back" and let me no what you think. . . . . Go on now stop reading this comment and start pleasing some very lucky lady.
Excellent written
| Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
As it has been said, Women definantly feel the same way.Of course the way me and my pep explain it is "We saw a fine ass man lastnight we wouldnt mind goin down on". Well dont let me go to far.
Nice write. I enjoyed Tamesn
| Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by Tameson | [ Reply to This ]
  So that you still feel the pleasure even when you just think

Can you do that? Can I see? lol This was a piece that really makes a girl want to reach down and... Okay lets move on. Great write. You really have the art of sex down obviously. If a man were to do this to me...I'd propose.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  DAMN BOY! I ain't gonna lie, I was really feeling this... Maybe too much... I gotta give you your props, you are doing big things, and I think you got what it takes to go far. I just... damn... lemme catch my breath...

Well, I don't care what anybody says, you got talent without a doubt, and I know you're making me rethink some of my work. I agree with Brown, it was a bit... raunchy... I guess, but it works, I think it got your point across loud and clear. I gotta say though, you DEFINITELY crossed the line between making love and straight f***ing with this bad boy. Not that that's a bad thing. I love the sleek metaphors (Let me groove inside your slot as I play with your props
Driving and hitting corners and swerving becasue I'm drunk). That's hot. I think you distinguished yourself with this; I don't think many people would have the courage or (vocab word for you) temerarity to write something like this. And again, girls do feel this way cuz I got a poem a little less intense called Come Again that's along these same lines. Maybe I'll rewrite it in response to this (it'll be like 21 Questions and 21 Answers). Don't mind me, I'm crazy. But yeah, boy, you set yourself apart, don't let nobody tell you otherwise. Keep it up.
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  dude, damn, that's my only compliment on this. what a passionate writing, a little exitement with great words can never be beat. bravo** and yeah i agree, some girl is damn lucky to get to play with that fire** Keep it up

| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm with Brownsdelight, damn this is hot. I'm sick too, and I'm kinda hot and bothered over here. It starts out very romantic, then it kinda strays, but still very good.

There's a few errors.
Baby I've got plans to light candlelight as we dance
Maybe it should be: Baby I've got plans to dance by candlelight.
Your so thick! Your should be You're
That you sex like a vet
Im not even sure I get this.

Anyway, this is really good. The fourth stanza is my favorite.
Great job!

| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  HOT DAMN IS RIGHT! you got my hands all shaking here at work, that i can barely type. that is rare that someone can show THAT MUCH DEPTH of passion, and desire. WOW! lucky girl, lucky girl who gets to put out that much fire!
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
  You are a sexy b**ch, anyone who can write like that...well all I can say is yum. I'm sick of the lovie dovie crap and this is just what I would love to hear.Well well I'm sure you have one lucky gal somewhere and I'm sure shes pretty happy.
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
  The first stanza was pretty weak made me bored then i looked down a little farther and it looked good so i kept reading and it was pretty good lol
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
  well HOT DAMN! here I am barely breathing from getting over the flu and you managed to A. make me smile. B. make me chuckle C. got my hormones jump started! lol

I will admit that is was a little hmmm maybe crude rather than romantic, but hey it's nice to switch up the sweet tenderness and the pull my hair and spank my ass type of thing.

ps just to let you know girls feel the same way
if and when you get a chance check out my chocolate kissess post i think you'll enjoy :)
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Take Me Take Me Take Me !!!!!!!!!!! ...Eeeeeek [censored] sorry wrapped up there....*deep breathing* ...seriously hot ...i know its been said down there...but oh boy *blush*
Im speechless....or rather i cant type anymore ...imma just going to sit here and bite my lip ....Um Mahaaaaaaa
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]

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