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    dots Submission Name: Small Town Lust (part 1)dots

    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       just testing this out....it's apart of a much longer poem....all sorts of comments/feedback welcome

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    dotsSmall Town Lust (part 1)dots

    Rain drips danced like tribal pulses on the steps of our little house wrapped in the woods of the small town in which we call home. You drip wet kisses down my neck and over my body as we move to the music of heavy sighs and a creaky headboard. Hands raised over my head, held by yours, you are the one in which I submit to: my body, mind, soul….but for now my pleasure. It rises as legs wrap around your waist, pushing your power deep inside, my body driven wild…holding tight…..tighter…

    Submitted on 2005-02-01 17:26:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn buddy! Yo' freaky a$$. I guess I started a trend today with that. My bad. Anyway, good write. It is very vivid and leaves a lot up to the imagination. Tight work. Keep doing what ya doing.
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]

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