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Winds of Change


Author: Josh
ASL Info:    17/nh
Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 276 /226 /30
Words: 117
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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i tried to compare a fart to the love/loss tug of war of life. How yoiur love for someone else can be what you want so much deep down, but sometimes your own emotions can really steer those of most importance of your life away, much like when you walk up a flight of busy stairs and light one off on every step. just looking for thoughts.. this is the quintessential peice of my existence, just need some feedback.


Winds of Change



your mouth opens wide,
and my gas is expelled
in loving memory of love lost,
my butt sings for you
Beauty in a flower,
and such essence of human kind
spreads like a joyful disease
whether an SBD or Shart.
Take my hand,
but do well not to touch
the finger of my life, weathered and wavered
from lifes pulling and tugging.
I leave in a wake of smoke,
a screen of my fear and longful mourning
of love lost,
my veils of methane give haste
to my ever changing emotions of lust
The winds of change are on the horizen, i smell
and your bossom of fire burns,
as my ass burns for you.




Submitted on 2005-02-01 19:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I thought I had heard it all. I thought that I had seen it all. and then I read this and I got the weirdiest / funnist little cartoon in my head. I must say I womt forget it and never will be able to hold abck a laugh when ever I go back and read it.
thanks for saving my crappy day.
Kacey
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]
  LOL LOL LOL LOL I never ever ever type LOL but this poem truly deserves it, I will say that for once. I honestly can't decide it you were being truly serious when you wrote this, or if you wrote it to be funny. I just can't tell. I thought it wuz insane! I love it! I must add this to my faves, so I can have a nice laugh every now and then. Wow, yeah, you are great.
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
  A beautifully anally retentive poem. Some poets write of Mars and some of Venus, but your definitely write about Uranus. This fart poem beats even the little German ditty that goes "Fuer jedes Boehnchen gibt's ein Toenchen" which means "For every little bean there's a little note". Sort of reminds me of "There butt for the grace of God go I." Now, this next part of my critique is real and serious. I have a dog called Bonny who always farts in the car, especially after she has eaten bones. After one violent emission, I happened to remark, "Now that's a bonny fido fart!"
| Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
  lol ok i read your description and you so totally can NOT be writing this as a serious poem. i was laughing so hard i farted
| Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
  Ow! My stomach hurts! I can't...stop...laugh...laughing!LOL X 1,000!

Whew! I think i have now gained my composure. I think...Yeah. I have. Well...it seems that this is a poem about loving someone from the heart of your bottom as well as from the bottom of your heart. Nice Job!
(giggling)
bluemayskye (a.k.a. Mz. Farts-a-lot)
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by bluemayskye | [ Reply to This ]


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