Description: This is the first poem I've written since I got married. Needless to say that's all that's on my mind right now. I think my muse has finally warmed up to my new wife and may even like her, but who's to say, the muse is a fickle fairy indeed.
The Events of 1/12/05 -------------------------------------------
A ring
Tamed my tigress,
A veil
Masked the tears
The joy
overwhelmed us
And love conquered fear
My friends and my brothers
All stood at my right
And supported me as they always have
An angel in white
Brought a tear to my eye
And her smile made every heart glad
The words were a blur
But the feelings were there
A moment we'll never replace
But I'll always feel the love
And the passion I felt
The first time my lips brushed her face.
I saw my father cry
For the second time in my life
And again his tears were tears of pride
My head is still swimming,
My heart is still racing
All because of my beautiful bride.
Beautiful. I always love when a guy writes something heartfelt like this. I like how each stanza seems to pick up pace, and each line gets longer. And the subtle rhyme wuz great too, not too in your face. I hope now you write many poems about your new wife... new inspiration I have only seen my Dad cry once... so I guess that will make 2 times also, on my wedding day. It better!
it about time the guy writes about his other side. the side they like to keep hidden for a while. I think your wife is quite lovely. I hope the best for you two, the bit about your father is pretty cool becasue the father figure is supposed to be this big statue of rules. and whats best, and then he cries and it shows you that what your doing is right. keep it up. Kacey
i really like this, so much. it is very sincere, the only thing i have against this is the spacing. the spacing. the spacing. the flow i get is amazing and it sets such a lovely tone. but it's not how it's spaced. maybe it's just me? i am an oddball. but a good write nontheless
I can barely remember my own wedding, but I warmed to your poem because I related not to you, but to your father. I gave my daughter away this year and when she was at the altar saying her vows, I have to admit that I cried as well. It is difficult to judge the quality of your poem as poetry because the subject matter is so faultlessly nice. Congratulations.
cool write! ah, i remember much of the same things from that day [don't ever forget the date, btw...]. it's all bliss now, but remember this when you 2 are fighting [especially over something stupid. you'll be amazed at how many stupid things there are to fight about...] the only thing different from my wedding was that my dad didn't cry. i did see the pride in his eyes, however. :-)
Congratulations...i read this in the forum and thought it was a perfect expression of my wedding day..but in reverse of course. This is one of my favorite things about that game is that a simple phrase can be turned into a beautiful moment when the heart and mind are into it. My favorite thing about this is not only are you open and honest about your feelings, You step back and describe how your family reacts to the event. That support can make or break a marriage. I'm lucky that my husband and I still have the support of both of our families after 11 years. I Wish you all the happiness that a good marriage can bring. jan
Submission Name: The Events of 1/12/05
I have only seen my Dad cry once... so I guess that will make 2 times also, on my wedding day. It better!
