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    dots Submission Name: Wildernessdots

    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    They come at all sides
    With no place to hide
    I fight to follow the light
    The glow is growing dimmer
    I see shadows of what
    My life could become
    If I wonder through
    The meadows of time
    If I look to the heavens
    Will you send me a star
    Who was meant to come
    Clean up this mess and
    To save this broken heart

    I never meant to hurt you
    I never meant to fall apart
    I thought I was stronger than this
    I thought I could come back from my abys
    I want to help you
    Look how broken I've become

    There is deception at ever corner
    I never know if I can trust my own eyes
    Temptation comes in more than one form
    Even love comes at a price

    I hope I'm not lost in the wilderness
    I hope I'm not lost in the wilderness

    Submitted on 2005-02-01 22:14:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wouldn't wanna get lost in the wilderness either, especially alone...
    if you do feel lost I hope you find your way back home real soon!
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked the first stanza...it gives u those sort of feeling of lost...which is also close to nature..if u get what i mean... Anyway, I thought it's a decent poem...THere's always hope if u place your faith in it..
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by cOoL_DudE | [ Reply to This ]
      it reminded me of a song. the diction is just too unoriginal and not used effectively. its a decent poem but it wont last
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by neonlights | [ Reply to This ]

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