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    dots Submission Name: Junkie of the Souldots

    Author: runaway_poet
    ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
    Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42/41/21
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    dots Junkie of the Souldots

    Countless sorrows thoughtless nights

    lost in cold country days dreaming of warm city nights

    shivering cold winters love

    praying for angels to come take me above

    crying over milk that spills

    making hopfiled dream like taking pills

    geting a rush of posibility

    knowing full well of the extent of my ability

    standing over my soul dead from overdose

    sadly accepting that il never hold anyone close

    hope is the drug for the soul

    took too much now stuck in this hole

    endless repitition that i now call life

    all i ever wanted was a lover and a wife

    whenever i come close its always ended with shame

    no matter what will be done i will always be the one to blame

    now broke from spending it all on hope i now cannot pay the reapers toll

    all because i was a junkie of the soul

    Submitted on 2005-02-02 09:50:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "making hope filled dreams like taking pills"

    that says it all
    now you're beginning to remind me of.. me.
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by rhogue20 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the imagery in this poem, it's like i'm physically there feeling every emotion portrayed. This poem was so beautiful and intriguing too. I love how you instill hope in anyone who reads this poem, hope is such a wonderful feeling
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by BrownEyedBeauty | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery you have created, the flow of the poem is excellent, the words you use just beautiful...it's very calming, with additive of melancholy, soulful.
    These are my fave lines:
    shivering cold winters love
    praying for angels to come take me above...

    hope is the drug for the soul - yea, and that's very true.:)
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by Dana | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Dana; your words are well chosen and well assembled. You've managed complex scenes and feelings in a few phrases. Well done!
    Forgive me for nitpicking, but the last two lines could be broken up to match cadence with the rest of the poem. I would suggest:

    "now broke from
    spending it all on hope

    i cannot pay the reapers toll
    all because i was a junkie of the soul"

    as you wouldnt have to change the wording, but could get an easier rhythm to the ending.

    Hope doesnt bankrupt the soul; I believe hope keeps the soul alive.
    It's like kryptonite to that reaper... ;)
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]

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