Heart's Sing

Author: xena z rokax Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 35 /35 /16 Words: 112

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Heart's Sing

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heart's sing what tears cry who will ever wonder why all alone in quiet hour here I feel love's sweet embrace near and I cannot but cry new tears and quiet whoever hears when they know the reason I weep they in their heart's will also keep love's kindness and generosity to all and in joyous way will call come near, those who would hear of love's sweet and glorious ways your heart will dance till the end of days and love's melody on the wind will gently blow when out the door you quietly go sweet tears like raindrops will softly fall and nourish the love in the heart's of all

Submitted on 2005-02-02 14:02:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i feel that this poem is about compasion, and why do i feel so since it is only in compasion towards ppl or maybe towards someone special that though not having them nearer we cry when a thought on them comes in mind. heart's sing what tears cry who will ever wonder why all alone in quiet hour here I feel love's sweet embrace near and I cannot but cry new tears and quiet whoever hears i think we cry when we see someone in pain, suffering from maybe illness or broken heart, and we cry despise knowing that we cannot do anything and this is love and when it is for all it is compasion. it is amazingly written, it is very sweet poem. well i hope i interpreated it ok, if not i am sorry. bye

| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]

Very sweet. I absolutely love the first line. There are some corrections though...just a couple suggestions. Punctuation and capitalization would certainly improve this piece. There also needs to be a bit of variation in the vocabulary. You use 'hear' or here' a couple times and in such close proximity they tend to clash or cancel the other's impact. Same with 'near'. In the last line, I don't think an apostrophe is needed in 'hearts'...if I'm interpretting correctly. Hope those help a little. Again, they're just suggestions!

| Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]

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