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    dots Submission Name: Dream??? Nigh.....dots

    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDream??? Nigh.....dots

    It all started with a dream. Iím still to off to understand what it means.
    For days my soul slowly degrades. I canít remember, events or actions, it like being trapped in a maze.
    So far today was the worst. My soul feels so chaotic, depressed, and off course.
    Iím not saying I am doing the wrong thing, but my entire self has been shaking from a simple dream.
    In my dream I saw a temple. Made of stone multilayered and completely unknown.
    As I looked upon this temple my breath was stolen.

    There was fear in my body and I heard me groaning. What this temple represents I am not ready to know, but it felt grim and completely unbearable.
    Now it seems I canít get a good nights sleep.
    So maybe my next poem will interpret what it means.

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      Original I think, this is a good interpretation of something that's quite difficult to write down.
    For me anyway, I once had one when I was Ice skating and gunning down old people at the same time, now that's just wierd.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      A past life? A leak in your subconcious(spell check)? i wish i knew what all my dreams ment and im sure it would help us all out if we could intertpret them clearly, but a dream such as this affecting you in everyday life may take some serious interpreting, take care

    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah yes, a chaotic soul is one of the most gripping and persistent maladies known to me. I have had similar experiences for many years. Anyway, about the poem. I wish you could elaborate more. What kind of temple? Even if you don't know what it represents, what possibilities are there? Does it feel like something is soing to happen? I've many questions about this poem. the one think that it does with apparent and lithe ease is convey that sheer fear and utter chaos that has gripped you as you dreamed this particular dream. That was beautifully done. Who knows? Perhaps your next poem will be able to interpret what you saw and felt in your dream.
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by NightCrawler | [ Reply to This ]
      great description. I know exactly how you feel. The only problem is that the poem gets a little wordy twords the middle. Overall this poem is pretty good.
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      well the closest thing I could relate to this would be my outer body experiences. They are really weird... I don't feel like I have any kind of control over myself and well my soul has separated from my body! It's happend 6 times in my life and sometimes I wonder why it happend to me?
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by Besu | [ Reply to This ]

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