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    dots Submission Name: Too many doubts in a good mandots
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    Author: shombray
    ASL Info:    18/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 103/91/26
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 823
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    Description:
       There are not only just mothers but there are also fathers who go through the struggle of being a single parent. When young men do get a girl pregnant, they leave her , but we fail to acknowledge the ones that try to stay with the mother and child.


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    dotsToo many doubts in a good mandots
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    She said that I would leave her
    When she told me of her tragic news
    I asked her when was the baby due
    She said that I would leave her
    As her stomach started to swell
    I said she was still pretty from what I could tell
    She said that I would leave her
    When she pushed the baby out
    I told her to quite accusing me of all her silly doubts
    She said that I would leave her
    When I left her and the baby at home all day
    I had to remind her that I work 2 jobs to try to make a way
    She said that I would leave her
    Because I did not love her enough
    But spending time with the baby and her is really tough
    She said that I would leave her
    With her bags packed as she walked out the door
    I do not care to see her face around here anymore
    She thought that I would leave
    Because most men don't stay
    When their girl is expecting a baby on the way
    She thought that I would leave her
    But she flipped the script and left me
    With a newborn baby who's love I can always see.




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      i thought it was a great write especially comeing from a girl but thats the way some relationships work the girl expects the guy to leave and when he dont she makes up for being surprised by leaving him in the end keep up the good work
    kristen
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece. It brings into light something that is hardly spoken of. Not all of us are bad or not man enough to do what must be done, there are some good ones out there.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not one for always writing good coments but i have to say this one i really enjoyed i loved it . But wonder what you reason for writing it . was it to inform or a real life situation ? keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by Lucy L. | [ Reply to This ]


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