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    dots Submission Name: true lovedots
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    Author: lynn7
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 298/212/58
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 300
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 410



    Description:
       Just a simple love poem.


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    dotstrue lovedots
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    I love to see the
    light on your face
    to see your eyes
    sparkle with peace
    you hold my heart
    deep inside
    i'm wide open
    from you I cannot hide
    you are my gift from
    up above
    my friend and
    my true love
    I once almost lost you
    but I've found my way
    you were patient
    you did not stray





    Submitted on 2005-02-02 19:11:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it short but i like the way u use the word sparkle. Its so sweet that must be a special person in your life
    -garnet4david-
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
      This was like: YAYYYY!!!

    Originality++
    (now that i've spent 5 min tying to think of constructive criticism, i'll go on a happy note: Sweet and Keep it up)
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by Dalja | [ Reply to This ]
      That was heart-felt. Short and sweet, right to the point. I liked it. It could have been a little more attention-grabbing, but I still like it!
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good. It was short ,sweet and simple. Whoever you wrote it to must be a special person in your life.Good luck And nice job. Enjoy reading it
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Sun Spots | [ Reply to This ]


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