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    dots Submission Name: "JUST A PASSIVE HABIT" (I'M ON)dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1462



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       This I a song I wrote. My band "Max"s Dog" play it from time to time.~L.t


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    dots"JUST A PASSIVE HABIT" (I'M ON)dots
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    I never knew how much.
    How much I love to be out of touch
    with myself and You, I want nothing to do with
    (anymore)
    And when tomorrow comes.
    I'm gonna get some (again)
    Cause some highs in life are better off kept on
    the down low.
    Like Ahhhhh! WHEN your eyes just roll back as
    time rolls on.
    Its just a Passive Habbit I'm on (till its gone)
    So I grab it. Man I GOTTA HAVE IT.
    And then I chase it. Cause I cant erase it.
    Im losing all my friends. Its so over rated.
    And then It comes (Again)-
    Yeah, just like it did before.
    Except this time a little more.
    I swear I fuckin hate it.
    I'm so fuckin faded.
    Where have I said this before?
    I'm losing all my friends.
    Its so over rated.
    I think I need some more- (again)
    Goin down that road that leads to my end.
    Have you looked into my eyes?
    Do you know how close I am till it comes again.
    I hide behind lies,
    feeling my demise.
    covering all the pain that I have inside.
    Its just a passive habbit.(I 'm on)
    I gotta fuckin have it. (till it's gone)
    So I fuckin stab it, just one last time.
    Cause I've fuckin had it,
    with poisoning my mind.
    This time I'm gonna face It, and erase It,
    and salvage whats left of this life of mine.....~m




    Submitted on 2005-02-02 22:08:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good song. I wonder what kind of band you have. I need an idea of what kind of music you play to get it down. Seems kinda raplike or Sublime-esque, I don't know. You should post what kind of music you play if you post that you have a band. Good write though, from the heart. Good quality. -sin
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]


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