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    dots Submission Name: Questioning Destinydots
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    Author: sensesfail
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 15/18/14
    Words: 356
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsQuestioning Destinydots
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    why are only crows left of a murder?
    their chorus only sings more sorrow
    why must we bury our love six below?
    when home is where the heart is, hearts taken from their tomorrow
    why does pain always follow beauty?
    rose's thorns bleed the heart of those in awe
    why can one word brake off perfection's last safety?
    not from passion but from tongue's lies, a flaw
    why does her reassuring come from no words but affection?
    cold kiss of a liar, she assures each pawn they're alone
    how can man-made metal play the role of God?
    predestination shot short, life scared for a future unknown
    why does painful writings only flow more tears?
    pen bleeds dry, a beating silence, suicide
    why must two men betray heaven for passion?
    Bullet through His heart, skies shed, He cried
    Why must we hate these men for their true lives?
    for all sins slice, knives to Lord's skin
    why do one's own needs drive a crime of no love?
    lack of committment, committs a committment to sin
    how can an evil man cry "sanctuary" and find innocence?
    destined for hell, vampire comes in day for forgiveness
    why must light fall to shine the darkness?
    evil lurks, strengthens, death comes to live in this
    how can perfection love mere worthlessness?
    His arms embrace each restless, loathing soul
    how from one praise can he give eternal happiness?
    unconditional love to leave the heart pumping full
    why does our savior hang by his miracles?
    nine-inch-long devils bite to inject, infect poison
    how can one induce a pain that brings tears to others' eyes?
    hangman watch in horror, not a man but Creator's son
    why must we stare deep into ourselves?
    mirror reflects God's beauty, but her cries never leave the lips
    why must we always hurt for more?
    when we have the world hanging from our fingertips
    why must these rivers run from the source to the deceitful?
    when they are flowing from an ocean of clear blue desire
    why do we leave God forsaken until Death?
    realization of hell, it's too late, we're destined, deserving, all judged to fire




    Submitted on 2005-02-02 22:15:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as long as it is i suprizingly want you to say more. i liked it alot, i am going to add it to my favorites
    lack of committment, committs a committment to sin i really liked that line.
    very creative questions
    some i have thought of before.
    good job.
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by LLRDD | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good...you write a lot like me..but better...

    ill also add this to my favorites...
    perhaps splitting it into stanzas?
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by dublhelix | [ Reply to This ]



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