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Eternally Eternity

Author: hybridmagnolia
ASL Info:    19/male
Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 198 /273 /75
Words: 666
Class/Type: Lyrics /Longing
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tis a song about a young man who, at a younger age, rushed into the thing called "love" a little too fast. After realizing his mistakes and maturing a little, he looks for a second chance, but the girl he wishes to be with is no longer there. he wishes to join her in the heavens above... but knows he can't. all he can do is wait...

Eternally Eternity

You and I are lying
On the bedroom floor
Holding each other in our arms
As a way of staying warm
I run a finger through your hair
Then suddenly I realize
You're really not there
Just a figment of my imagination
Thinking about all the time I've been wastin'
Fillin' up my life up with lies
To hide
From the truth that I know
That I'm always facin'
My heart is racin'
My feet are pacin'
My mind falls apart
From the very wish of sin
Maybe it's a good thing that you left me
It gave me more than enough time
To finally see
Maybe I was takin' things just
A little to fast
Never really took the time
To look forward to the past
It's a good thing I finally did
Or else I would've crashed
Into the wall
That's been built around us all
Stealing pieces of that floor
Waitin' for us both to fall
Deeper and deeper
Into the depths of Hell
The price to pay
For the lust we keep givin' ourselves
So take my hand
I'll try to help you understand
That deep down inside me
There lies a better man
A man that doesn't want to rush
And doesn't ask for all that much
But would give you the world in a heart beat
Just to be yours

Should I stay or
Should I go
There's one last thing
I need to know
Will you be there
Waiting for me
To join you for

Crimson paint streaks across the wall
Off in the distance
Tear drops fall
My tear drops beat a
Rhythm on the pavement
As they drip from the rooftop
Into the basement
Traces of tears run down my face
And I look up at darkness
Of the night sky
As the angels cry above
Was it worth the wings and halo
When you gave up on my love?
Now I stand here all alone
On this rooftop
Looking ten stories below
Trying to find a spot
For my tears to drop
And my blood to clot
And if you weren't in my mind,
I'd pick a spot for
My corpse to rot
But unlike you
I don't have any wings
Come to think of it, with you gone
I don't have much of anything
To be there for me
To stop me from that fall
To help me back down
From atop the wall
Will I ever see you again?
You can haunt my dreams now and then
The least you can do is
Try to listen for me
As I kiss your picture at night
Your voice echoes back

Should I stay or
Should I go
There's one last thing
I need to know
Will you be there
Waiting for me
To join you for

From the caffeine to the nicotine
There not a thing in the world
That can stop these dreams
Maybe I’m supposed to see these scenes
And catch every detail
That comes up in between
Tryin’ to find something
That I haven’t yet seen
Or maybe
Maybe I should spend
More time on myself
Instead of spending my life
Living in this living Hell
It’s hard not to walk
Like I’m stepping on shells
When all I ever hear
Is the sound of Hell’s bells
Angels, demons, gods, devils
Takin’ all my fears
To a whole new level
I feel the blood rush
The darkness brings a hush
Over the field of dreams
That once was lush
The silver cross around my neck
Begins to collect dust
The blade of the knife
Begins to collect rust
And I’m
Forced to face the hate
Pressed up against the wall
Between both sides of debate
What no one seems to realize
Is that it’s already to late
I’ve locked the door
And I’ve closed the gate
And took my first steps down the road
How far will I go
Nobody knows

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  dude i was so not going to read this just because of the number of words in it...thats my least favorite number besides 14 minus very superstitious, its a curse...but because your a cool dude i am reading it at this present moment in time...ok im being honest, this kinda dont make sense to me...i mean i get the point i think, like the dude was an angel met a chick, killed his angel self for her, realized how bad the world was and committed suicide...i think this is what that is...
it doesnt make any sense to me because angels should so totally know better than to commit suicide! lol

well even if my guess is really off, i still think its sounds beautiful in a "confusing for me because i dont get it kinda" type of way



hey do you know what 'jarring' means??? because the dude gavinwhatshisname used it and it puzzles me
im thinking 'bouncy', 'bold' and 'a lot'...if it is, why didnt he just say "hey theres a lot of emotion in this"?? what does he want to make it fancy smancy??
ok im stopping, its not nice to make fun lol
| Posted on 2005-02-12 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
  The emotion in this is quite jarring. I found many moments expectedly downbeat but still with enough personal confusion rang throughout the passage to leave the overall feeling open to other things. Very intriguing...
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]

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