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Author: russiangopher ASL Info:    18/f/ca Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 10 /8 /4 Words: 83

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Push it silver sweet, push it all away from you. Trash it, make it neat years just fall away from you from the shaded creek to the highways, city streets, precious life delete, push it all away from you. Push it slivers gone, fingertips are getting worn, push away the days, seahorse clouds and arbor maze turns to choking smog and haze push it off with no delays, fight your dear desires push it all into the fire.

Submitted on 2005-02-03 04:55:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Nice poem I like the expression that was put into it! I like the end verses like turns to choking smog and haze push it off with no delays, fight your dear desires push it all into the fire. me likey this part keep it up peace & stay safe...

| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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