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    dots Submission Name: To Recall A Lifetime of uncalmdots
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    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Just do your thing. I wrote this a few weeks ago.


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    dotsTo Recall A Lifetime of uncalmdots
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    Often I am surprised at the things I do.
    To act so cold knowing it's not the truth.
    Coloring between the lines begging to break loose.
    To do what has to been done when no one else
    has a clue.
    It's a hard life to live to do what has, to want and not have, to fear yourself and to regret your past.
    I didn't notice at first when it started.
    Like the choice wasn't mine it was imparted.
    I hoped it was nonsense, but my devotion is constant trying to atone for the wrongs during my uncalmness. You'd see it as raw, but in fact; my morals remain intact.
    I do this perhaps, I seek forgiveness for by acts of cruel collapse.
    I hate to look back on those awful days such ominous ways looking through eyes of the past my future looks grave.




    Submitted on 2005-02-03 06:24:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, really good flow...it really sucked me in. Everything just came perfectly, like you knew exactly what you wanted to say and it seemed like there was a lot of pure emotion behind it. Great work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by omnipotent | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm... I don't know what to say after reading this, it kinda gave me a brain freeze. That's a good thing! LOL!
    Now you got me thinking, Hmmmm...
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the freedom & thought in this. it held my attention & i know exactly what you mean. sometimes i feel the same way. Anyways, it was really good :-)

    * NiKkKi *
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good write
    Free flowing but still together
    The word choice wasn't over-the-top
    But it was perfect for this
    not too simple or complex
    I liked this alot
    On a side note,
    I would like to thank you for the comment on "Feral" I think it's one of my favorites, but if you like that read "push",(dont read the comments under it first though :P )
    Thanks a ton, partner
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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