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    dots Submission Name: Perfect Things Are Tediousdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPerfect Things Are Tediousdots
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    You cast it away
    because you say it’s broken,
    but it’s not.
    You see the worth of nothing.
    You wallow in your ideas of perfection.
    Sometimes, you see the greatest things as flawed—
    the one cloud in the sky on a sunny day--
    but perfect things are tedious.
    The cloud doesn’t make the day any less warm,
    and the mole on your chin
    Makes your face more human,
    and just because I don't love you
    the way that you think I should
    Doesn't mean that I love you any less.
    This heart is yours.
    It's cracked but it still works.
    Don't cast it away.




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      I really love this. I can relate to it. My favorite lines are 'and the mole on your chin, makes your face more human' Very good. I hope you write a lot more!
    | Posted on 2004-04-03 00:00:00 | by Wonder Passing | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww! An' those darn commenters took all my ideas again!!! This is wonderful, Amy. Perfect things are tedious... how true, how very true. And those last few lines... beautiful. Very touching. <><
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      such self-pity this guy has. but sometimes when your heart is broken that is all you want to do: just cast it away for a time, and come back when you are strong enough to put the pieces back together. very goodwrite, Amy. I love how you weren't writing about your own heart, which ai see plenty of, but were writing about another that you have wounded. it is almost scolding, as to say "Stop being such a schmuck, and grow the hell up!" Good job...
    Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-03-28 00:00:00 | by KrimsonReaper | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet write, I really love the lines about the cloud. hope that this guy someday realizes what he misses.
    | Posted on 2004-03-28 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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