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    dots Submission Name: Glorydots
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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 957
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    Description:
       I don't really know what to say about this one. It
    was written about a year ago. I was going though
    a spiritual transformation. I know the rhyming is bad and there is not a good flow to it. Tell me what you think?


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    dotsGlorydots
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    My heart beats
    I'm ready for the risen
    I have given up these temporal things
    that hold me down
    so I can be freed

    I stand before you know
    not knowing what will be of me
    I give my life to you
    for the ticket
    to be truly be

    in your glory
    in your glory

    to my friends I read about
    you have lead me well
    and saved me from darkness
    where Satan dwells

    I used to think I was crazy
    and out of my mind
    you came to me in your word
    and healed me over time

    I fought a battle between
    the spirit and the flesh
    it tore my world apart

    you came to me
    in a book I read
    that told about a man
    not so different than me
    his name was Augustine
    he was born in 354 A.D.

    he told of a life that once was
    and a life to be
    of a time long ago
    or a time soon in deed

    I don't know where this will lead
    but my hearts beating faster

    and I'm now ready to leave this world


    in your glory
    in your glory






    Submitted on 2005-02-03 09:19:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this write
    It is positive in the fact that you have found the Lord and he has helped save you from the problems of the World
    I too have found this love
    And like you I am waiting patiently for my next voyage to begin
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Christie this is not a bad piece, I loved the way you intricately captured the metamorphasis phase for us...From an infant who was entagled in the web of ignorance, maybe its not the appropriate word, but ...Its like you were in the Darkness, but then the divine being revealed himself to you and then you embraced his love..I am a fanatic for such inspiring work especially if it converses the rebirth of a soul who has found the path of wisdom..This is an innocently crafted piece...Its been writen with such honesty...I appreciate your ability to exhude the Man who dwells in our hearts- God...A very moving piece...Be happy..Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool poem, I love the ending ~ it is such a positive statement.
    I hope you live a long healthy life and when the Lord does take you I hope you spend your eternity in Heaven under the ever-loving watchful eyes of Jesus!
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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