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    dots Submission Name: Invisibledots
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    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 888
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 966



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       Just letting everything out I guess.


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    dotsInvisibledots
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    A winterís breeze caught in my hair.
    Meaninglessly placed in a box full of meaningful memories I'd like to remember.
    Yours are the only lips I've wondered about.
    Wondered why they mouthed the curses you spat at me in angry remorse.

    Dreamt up a new hope and told the child in me to hold on.
    Coexisted for but a few weeks and ran away like Goldy Locks in unsafe territories.

    The dreamer in me loved your reveries.
    Never mine, but I hoped to be a part of them.
    Cried until my eyes bled black.
    And all is well for the unsophisticated...
    For the untrained beholder.

    I hold it out to you rather than wear it on my sleeve.
    But nonetheless I am invisible to you.
    Tell Miss Maudie I did what I could.
    And I didn't bother to whisper to the passing wind that tangled itself in my useless tragedies.
    I never learned my lesson.




    Submitted on 2005-02-03 09:30:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow I like that normally my main complaint is not enough imagery, not enough to get me interested but this is very good and if anything it is all imagery. I like it. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by j4wolfe | [ Reply to This ]
      Welcome to EliteSkills!
    This is a really good poem, you sound like you've got a lot on your mind ~ can I give you some advice now? You did a good job here expressing your inner emotions so my suggestion would be to keep on writing. You seem to have great talent for writing, so keep it up ~ and again, welcome to EliteSkills!
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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