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    dots Submission Name: These Tears She Criesdots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThese Tears She Criesdots
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    These tears she cries
    Each day and night
    Fill up a river
    A river of her emotions.
    She tries so hard to be happy-
    She tries so hard to smile
    She prays to the lord in the heavans above
    That one day soon her heart would be free
    Free from all her pain and sorrow
    Her world is so dark and grey
    Filled with loneliness and emptyness
    She can't understand why she hurts so much
    She can't understand why she feels so unloved
    She searches and searches for some peace in her life
    She searches and she searches for love
    And finds nothing at all
    Theses tears she cries
    Each day and night
    Fill up a river
    A river of her emotions.




    Submitted on 2005-02-03 10:32:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have to believe there ARE a lot of people that do what ur talking about in this poem..I know I do it. It's probably not right..but I think we've all probably forced a smile...and pretended we were happy..like we weren't dying inside. We've all felt that lonliness and that desperation...and I know I've cried enough tears to fill up a river...lol...and I just think you captured that "river of emotions" you were talking about so well. Great write. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great writing. You capture the emotion wonderfully. Keep up the good work.
    Theses tears she cries
    Each day and night
    Fill up a river
    A river of her emotions.
    This part is brilliant!
    See ya
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      absolutley wonderful! I think you did an awesome job! I like how you repeated the begining at the end.I've often felt like this and even prayed for the same thing and reasons. I think you did a wonderful job capturing this feeling. I really like this. It flows well and I like that it doesn't rhyme. I'm getting tired of rhyming...I like rhyming...but I'm tired of it today lol. newho. I think you did a wonderful job and this one's going into my fav's!
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this poem could use a little more flow to it. I like what you have. Just try to make it flow a little more. Hope to read more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by No_purpose | [ Reply to This ]
      I follow what this says, but I can't find much of a flow or rythem.
    I feel what this says, could be great if you worked on it a little more

    -sjatos
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by whiteshadows | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it. I have a poem "divine" you should read.
    Good job. Great emotion.
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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