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    dots Submission Name: Color of Your Paindots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I have already submitted this but there was no title and I didn't get as many comments as I wanted.


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    dotsColor of Your Paindots
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    I watch you bleed and I feel so invisible
    you don't see me standing here willing to help
    every wound that scars you is another wound that will make you numb
    and you are ignorant to the pain

    you like the misery that she gives you
    you somehow deal with the life you now live
    and I am an outsider
    watching you slowly die
    watching the pain that falls from your eyes
    watchig every piece of broken heart shatter to the floor
    I'de pick you up but you don't even know that I am here
    and I guess that I just want you to know
    that I know the color of your pain
    and I know the keys to your broken heart




    Submitted on 2005-02-03 12:31:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it. I felt like god was talking to me. I know I'm weird. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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