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    dots Submission Name: Roses Are Reddots
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    Author: DontSaveMySoul
    ASL Info:    20/m/cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 194/184/42
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       an old one, last few lines are about being sick of my cutting, yet so addicted to it. umm, i think it was writen after V criticized me for being so negative...so i decided that seeing as how she's the only one who sees me as being negative, i'll be especially negative for her.


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    dotsRoses Are Reddots
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    "Roses are Red, Violets Are Blue,
    My Soul Is Dead, Thanks To You"
    -or-
    "I was like this before it was cool."


    My Butterfly won't fly away
    My sun won't rise
    Skies are black today
    Bitter slaves of self destruction
    Are the only company to stay
    If I don't have time to cry
    What's the use in play
    So instead I sit and dwell
    Enamored with sorrow and pain

    Retrace my wounds of old
    Taste my distaste
    For my soul that was sold




    Submitted on 2005-02-03 12:56:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. Really, just so, shopped up and spit at the reader. Images went through my head as i read it, and i just really like this. So short and sweet and tells it like it is. great work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      although the poem was of a serious nature,i found that there was the potential for humour in it.of course you are dealing with a difficult situation and i am not making light of that but as far as your opening lines are concerned,i would simply written "roses are red;violets are blue;i don't care what you think;so [censored] you".good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]


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