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    dots Submission Name: Thank you, Samdots
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    Author: ellisa
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 400/415/125
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       just a silly little heartfelt one, to a true friend and fellow poem writer!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThank you, Samdots
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    Thank you, Sam,
    For coming
    At such
    Short notice…

    We’re paper and glue,
    Me and you,
    You help me out
    When I get stuck,
    And I try to hold you together…











    Submitted on 2005-02-03 13:11:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cute little poem, original to use glue to describe a relationship in a positive way. The only thing that seemed unnecesairy to me was using ';' in the second last line.

    Nice write =]
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Lostinbeer | [ Reply to This ]
      LIB is right about the semicolon. If you ditched the conjunction you would use it,
    "When I get stuck;
    I try to hold you together..."
    but aside from that I like it. It feels like the last word is used as a double entendre'
    holding from falling apart "together"
    and you and sam, "together" holding.
    Neat.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]


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