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    dots Submission Name: What are you so proud of?dots
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    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 712
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    Bytes: 677



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       I was pretty pissed when I wrote this...Let me know what ya think.


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    dotsWhat are you so proud of?dots
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    Whatever is worth remembering is nonexisential.
    I don't even recall you being ashamed.
    What are you so proud of?
    You parade around holding onto what you are not.
    It hurts to know everything you will never be.
    A temper like your own, what would I wish to remember?
    You laid your hands on me and I cried to watch you wilt away.
    A lifeless animal lay limp on the side of the road.
    And you will never yield as much beauty.
    A hesitant voice barely audible above your own...
    Asking me to run...
    To free myself.
    For the truth is all too simple.
    You love me,
    But you cannot have me.




    Submitted on 2005-02-03 16:14:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      whhhoooaaa I'd hate to be on your bad side. As far as the writing it was superb. If only you could have seen the expression on my face when I read it. It is very powerful and unique, quite good.
    | Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
      awww thats sooo good! so much emotion in it! u did an awesome job! i can really relate to ur poem! it has so much in it, moves u from begining to end...
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by DancingGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to the begining. I think you did a wonderful job. I really like it. Some of the best writes come from when someone was pissed and just decided to write. nice job!
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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