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    dots Submission Name: Love...In Your Sacred Namedots

    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove...In Your Sacred Namedots

    Too many days have been spent coldy.
    Lonesomely hoping that out of osme careless action would come a miracle.
    And you would be bound to me as I seem to be to you.
    And one day I wish to awaken and realize that you are mine just as I am yours.
    I'd throw myself at your feet and scream at the top of my lungs...
    In your sacred name...
    Screaming bloody murder.
    For I am dying...
    For love...
    In your name.
    I do not seem to care for anything but you.
    A child...
    Crying for the sake of crying.
    An unnatural birth,
    But hope is left.
    Hope if abundant.
    As for chance...
    I see no way around chance.
    I feel you cannot see me.
    You cannot feel for me.
    You cannot give me a world that does not belong to you.
    But I toil with the facts and scream at the top of my lungs...
    In your sacred name...

    Submitted on 2005-02-03 17:21:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You did it once again you are a very talanted writer. I got the picture perfect. The flow and constant emotion in your words are great. I also loved the way it opened, kept tempo, and ended. I am going to make sure I check back for all your new writing from time to time.
    | Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
       absolutley beautiful! This is an amazing poem. You did a wonderful job expressing this feeling. I've often felt like this before. I think that the begining is my favorite part. I've wished that before. I've just felt everything in this poem before and I've never been able to write it down like this. I think you hit it just right. everyone has typos, so don't worry about those. There isn't anything bad to say about this. well not bad but criticize. I love the whole thing. I'm going to add this to my favorites!
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]

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