Ruins
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Just felt like writing something that is hopefully haunting and moving.
Ruins
through dark ruins of empires spent monuments to failure I wander on with deep rage pent I wander, ever wander ivy choked walls and crumbling halls legacies of doom cold wind blows and darkness flows but all is silent as a tomb monuments along tenebrous paths caressed in darkness deep on them written epitaphs of kingdoms laid to sleep but I wander onward still over dale and shadowed hill every single step i take on these dark and hallowed grounds into the opressive silence sounds I'm witnessing the wake one last view of glory failed splendor become decayed my anger rises, unpent, unveiled that such great things could be unmade but as for them, thier time has passed nothing here was meant to last darkness will draw them in Into obscurity they will fall great empires that once had it all and all will start again |
Submitted on 2005-02-03 20:12:37 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| You write with potency and description. I like the use of your wording in your poetry. The descriptions you use in your writes are vignette. You sketch a painting in your words. Glad you lead me to this peice. Would have hated to have over looked it. illusions | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ] | I love your rhyme patterns! You have quite the skill with the rhymes! Makes me think of the fantasy and sci-fi books I have read because they almost always seem to have ruins in them. Anyway, great write! | | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ] | this is really kool.to bad I think and feel this way today.. you really know how to capture your readers. you succeded in doing just what you aimed for.great writing. | | Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by wildheart | [ Reply to This ] | as my friend soulraven said, what you say here rings quite true. the piece was most enigmatic, only revealing its theme in glimpses, and i find that takes a special talent. reading a couple of your pieces, i think im gonna keep my eye on you. i think you have the ability to stun with your words, so keep at it and your manifesto will come out. keep good rhymes alive says i. i hold a special place in my heart for that. keep it up. | -Q | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ] | in the first stanza, it's spelled wonder. i really like the rhyme scheme in the second stanza, though. you spelled it wander again in the fourth stanza. makes a depressing cycle, though...empires crumble and are rebuilt, only to become decadent, and crumble once more. i don't quite understant your wondering....seems like you are just an observerer. a well structured and writen piece. | | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ] | Venust piece, All great things must be cut off or they can never become great how can anyone know what true greatness is if they don't have anything less than great for them to judge by? So, what you say is very true all must come to an end and then rise again. It's the chronicle of life. I hope to read more of your stuff. | Semper Fidelis, Christopher | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ] | well i tihnk you suceeded in your writing it is quite moving im not really sure what it is about this but i think its awsome |  | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by setsuna | [ Reply to This ] | |
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