Deital Complex by DontSaveMySoul

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Submission Name: Deital Complex dots

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Author:	DontSaveMySoul
ASL Info:	20/m/cali
Elite Ratio:	3.84 - 194/184/42
Words:	127

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	318
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	844

Description:
my deital complex ran amock here.

Deital Complex dots

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Once upon hypocricies
I prayed to saints
And begged false dieties
I wondered aimless
In the darkness
Of opulent temples
Filled with starkness

The falsehoods bored me
I was tired of following
A God that ignored me
So I surrendered beliefs
Turned my back to faith
I was just a step short
Of a lifeless wraith

Four years later I found light
I found a true Diety
To guide me through night
Through torments uncounted
He has granted me power
From days of fleeting glee
To my darkest lonely hour

Follow the God of Abraham, and be gifted anguish. Follow the lord of Earth, and be granted pleasure. Praise the King of Martyrs, and enjoy death. Praise me, and achieve satisfaction

Submitted on 2005-02-03 21:00:43 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice. A real thinking piece, i like it. I have no religion right now, i was raised catholic (which sucks ass by the way), then i was a wiccan, and now i'm nothing, just agnostic i suppose...anyway, i really like this piece, jsut your whole outlook and how you chose to portray it is so intersting.
| Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this piece of personal power. It's message appealed to me a lot.
No offense to the religious amongst us, but often the organized religions downplay the personal spirit in favor of the collective spirit, which strikes me as sad.
Seems to me like the individual spirit is more important; as it must find worth and faith in itself before truly blossoming into a positive force in the world.
As far as the structure of the poem itself, I'd suggest breaking up the last stanza some putting one god on each line to allow easier comparison. Just my two cents...feel free to ignore my nitpicking. ;)
Thanks for sharing a powerful read.
| Posted on 2005-02-13 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice poem to glorify God and the way he helps us even when we are foolish. I think it is spelt deity rather than diety. When I saw the title dietal complex I thought it had something to do with vegetarianism (lol)
| Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]
  So you wrapped all of the stages of religion in one poem pretty impressive, Kind Sir. I upon my research found that i am a Omnist i believe that in all religions since all of One greater Power and from there trail off in varies directions. But the poem itself is a work of art and i hope to read more thank you for this poem.

Semper Fidelis,
Christopher
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
  uhhhhhh... What religion are you? I can't figure out if your Christian, Jewish, or Muslim... Anyway, nice piece, blah blah blah. tired of writing, but if you could please clear that up for me, that'd be great... yeah...

becca
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by thesacredone | [ Reply to This ]

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