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    dots Submission Name: nothingdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 572



    Description:
       going trough rough times still.trying to calm down.


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    dotsnothingdots
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    I sit here clomplaining about my life
    I see a knife within my reach
    but, you're here with me
    stoping me from ending my life short
    i don't know what to do
    going to family to family
    having a family give up on you
    yet they say they still love you
    yet is stay here
    clomplaing about my life and
    I stilll see the knife within my reach.
    but you're still here
    giving me hope and trying make me see tommorow future.
    Thanks for being there i will always love you.




    Submitted on 2005-02-04 13:06:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Its a little hard to read. It dosen't flow verry well. But it is a good poem. You put the subject in a fairly new way. I liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by Rail | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a great poem. It's something that a lot of people can relate to-describing how that one hope can always pull you up. Hope to see more poems!
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I decided to check out some of your other stuff..
    I like this one to! This is sad though, when family gives up on you it's a horrible thing...
    If you ever want to talk though, IM me or something, don't do anything serious, cause even though I don't know you at all, I care.
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Laveina | [ Reply to This ]


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