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    dots Submission Name: Robots that We Have Becomedots
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    Author: runaway_poet
    ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
    Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42/41/21
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
    Total Views: 855
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 933



    Description:
       this peice i wrote while i was trying to sort things out and i got a glance at the big picture of things. and
    i want thoughts on what the peice is saying not about errors


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    dotsRobots that We Have Becomedots
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    Have we become robots now? I believe we have, we have filled our lives full of daily rituals to make our lives easier but we have become robots because of it. we wake up at a certain time eat at a certain time leave for work or school at a certain time return at a certain time and rest at a certain time. Schedules are controlling our lives we are getting less and less freedom with every invention to make our lives “easier”. Is making our lives so predictable really making our lives easier or just dull? We begin with a certain amount of time to live our lives and time is a commodity that we think is limitless but on the contrary it has a limit and it shortens bye every second. It’s almost like a fuse that has been lit and there is no stopping it. But it’s more like a commodity that we are oblivious to how rare it is and it’s getting rarer so why do we waste it? Why do we waste the only important thing in life back…Time




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      These past Christmas holidays, I went through a "faze" I guess: I turned all my clocks backwards, took the batteries out whatever, despising the idea that my entire life revolved around a circle of numbers.
    I can't really critique this though, it's just thoughts, and thoughts, no right or wrong thoughts.

    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by rhogue20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya the piece is rather cliché, but so is saying "If you don't have anything nice to say don't say anything at all" just becuase it may be cliché doesn't mean you should not takes these things to heart.
    The reason people waste time is becuase soicity forces the to need education and money to get anywhere so we don't get a choice to dull our lives with schedules.
    Nicely written bit of cliché, because some people seem to need to remeber to more obivous bits of life.
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Alyss | [ Reply to This ]
      I have one thing to say. Cliche.

    I know, the word cliché is a cliché in itself, but if you write a piece like this, that's all your gonna get.

    -Brooke
    | Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by Quiet Clamor | [ Reply to This ]


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