Description: welll... this believe it or not, was inspired by english class!!!? :O ... haha. I'm really finding the writing in that class way more interesting now. Annywayss.. i dont know if it flows right all together, as in like the "transition" or wahtever so lemme kno on that. but ya, its diff than alot of my stuffs so tell me what you think.. by the way i really need help with a title, i got nothin. it was sparkles but then it kind of narrowed peoples thinking to think im talking about sparkles themselves, which im not. so.. yea
Elegance wrapped up in a cloth -
stapled together thread by thread
Interlaced, a labyrinth
journey without direction,
the definition of perfection.
Assembled by hand
admiration is of the essence,
the details stretched indefinitely.
Simplicity at its best
as it rests upon my breast,
the beauty will remain hereafter
penciled nether our minds,
treasures that are often disregarded
will rest in all but the retarded.
p.p.s- title.. something journey... inner? beautiful? Look in the dictionary... or thesaurus. that always seems to help when Im in a rut. I have specific words for what I want to say, but I cant REUSE them or they dont rhyme. sooo thesaurus allll the way baby!
HOLY EFFING H. Who woulda thunk the same english lesson would have provoked a) a decent poem by me, and b) the best freakin' poem I've ever think youve written by you?! NADINE. I abbbssoooo-freakin-lutely LOVE THIS. It borders along crazy, and is somehow linked to mine but NOT. holy crap im speechless. Have you EVER seen me speechless? The best lines were: journey without direction, the definition of perfection.
Yah. Were all on journeys, not knowing where were going but nonetheless all striving for the same thing. Everyone has different definitions of perfection, and percieve the "perfect" life in different ways. I for one, define perfection as... myself. HAHAHAHHA JUST KIDDING. ohhh IM SO WITTY. I hope we get to write poems in english so we can rock her socks off. I want my public to admire me so. xoxoxo -Andrya ps. - if you get this, boogieman tonight? WAHOO
I really like English class now too! :) I really enjoyed the descriptions you included in this. It really worked in describing sparkles was it? The only suggestion I have is to take the word "maze" out after "labyrinth". Labyrinth means maze so it's a repeat of the word really. :) Anyway I enjoyed reading this. It's different and that's what makes it good. Good job. -blt
Submission Name: Picturesque
