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    dots Submission Name: Zoque Sacrifice2dots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 196/242/97
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 326
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1445



    Description:
       vvv suggested that I rhyme this poem previously submitted as free verse, so here it is. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsZoque Sacrifice2dots
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    Mother wept tears when her baby was sold.
    The boy-child cried, a good sign foretold.

    She hated herself for selling her son,
    Sacrifice needed for rain to be won.

    And the rest of the family needed food.
    So she sold him to feed remaining brood.

    Three priests paid the price taking the boy away.
    Zoque knew Rain Gods would be pleased this day.

    They shuttled the weeping boy the river down.
    Fighting currents, careful not to let him drown.

    They reached a cave in the cliffs high above.
    Climbing vines they soared upwards like doves.

    The strongest carried the boy up from the jungle,
    Strapped to his back; a valuable bundle.

    Fire struck in cave with billowing smoke to rise
    Child silenced with stone axe blow in surprise.

    His skull was smashed quickly to silence his rants
    Ritual performed like demons with fervent chants.

    They cut his heart free from his chest cavity
    And shared in the consumption so lustily.

    In a Jaguar sepulcher they drained the blood,
    The receptacle with red ooze did flood.

    They devoured the child from foot to hand,
    Paying homage to Rain God ending draught of their land.

    A new rain fell the very next day
    With a mother’s sorrow as part of the pay.




    Submitted on 2005-02-05 00:54:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      people need to grow up and realize that this isn't fiction. It happened just this way back in the day. Yeah, its gross, but whatever. You don't need help, saphire needs a dose of nuts. Anyways, I think I would have rather read the free verse version. But nice write all the same.
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      very weird but you have some great rhyming going on.but why such a little child? couldn't it have been an adult or another animal? and just to murder a helpless child to bring rain upon a barren ground WHAT exactly is the point?
    boo boo
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG! THAT IS SICK AND WRONG AND SCAREY IN A BAD WAY!i think u need help...there isnt very many pplz out here that want to hear about a baby being brutaly murdured and eaten!...i hope
    mheracai
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]



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