just heartache that was fortold on an old love song
Love that line ...Theres a sweet innocence to this that i just adore ..and its very well written and easy to read.... I absolultly hate that "more fish in the sea" [censored] too ...sometimes you catch the dolphin and the fish just dont seem to be as perfect Good Job Keep on Keeping on
you've done well here. i really like your rhyme scheme, a-b-c-a, i like it alot. um, some editing stuff: line 8 "it" should be "if", the last line change "on" to "in". otherwise you've captured something all can relate to in a very effective way. keep writin!
i hate that, when every1 tells you to just get over it, it's not the end of the world. sure there's other ppl out there, but none of them seem as perfact as the one that got away. i really liked this poem it was great!
For being 16, you capture what most people go through at any age,bravo
In your poem you can you are a quixotic lover, forgoing logic,because you never saw your lover less than favorable side,yet you still wanted to be in love so much, you love for him way two-sided,but with you being your own two-headed lover.