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    dots Submission Name: The Forgottendots
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    Author: mandyshay07
    ASL Info:    17/f/kentucky yall!
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 119/121/32
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 313
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 603



    Description:
       It's about happiness, a spiritual awakening. Happiness has been forgotten but is rediscovered. I think the transitions between the stanzas may need some work.. I'd love any suggestions/help you guys have! I'm thinking about entering it in a contest, so I need all the help I can get!



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    dotsThe Forgottendots
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    Taken up on wings of faith,
    battered and broken no more to be,
    cradled in the moon's embrace,
    engulfed in life's haunting lullabies...

    As the angels weep, far above,
    cleansing tears streaming
    endlessly down crimson cheeks,
    the mortal world despairs.

    Yet, I dance, my heart,
    I dance among the stars.

    In those depths of endless blue,
    infinite radiance shines.
    It whispers, echoing..

    There is more to life, dear heart,
    more to life than mortal song.





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    ||| Comments |||
      Whew... yeah. Awesomeness... the title really drew me in... but it was just... hmm... heavenly? I know it's about... 'The Forgotten'... but the imagery with the angels and everything didn't leave me to that conclusion... but that's okay... because I don't normally analyze and come up with a conclusion... so yeah. All I know is I loved it... and it's on my favorite's list.

    - Jen (Poet... of the Night!)
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by poetofthenight | [ Reply to This ]



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