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    dots Submission Name: Love Triangledots
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    Author: TDALBH
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 63/57/15
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 725
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Don't mind this one to much, just the ramblings of a sick and stupid person. I shouldn't be so tired at 2:07 in the afternoon, what's wrong with me? Anyway, if you read it thanks, and if you comment thanks as well, I don't really care what people think of this, I just wanted to put something down. Thanks for reading!!


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    dotsLove Triangledots
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    Is everything my fault?
    Do you really think that's true?
    I wish it were
    So I could blame myself
    But I'm not the only on in love

    Love triangle
    So simple in it's shape
    This perfect shape
    So perfect in it's hate

    A cold and senseless existance
    I wish it were only mine
    But I'm not the only one in love
    I'm not the only one with secrets

    Love triangle
    So simple in it's shape
    This perfect shape
    So perfect in it's hate

    A water soaked and bloody end
    I wish that I was the only one
    The one to think of it first
    But I'm not the only one in love
    I'm not the only one
    Destined for this end

    Love triangle
    So simple in it's shape
    This perfect shape
    So perfect in it's hate

    Medicine flowing through our veins
    Making us strong again
    Straps hold us down
    To prevent our screaming, glassy pain
    I wish I was the only one
    But I'm not the only one in love

    Love triangle
    So simple in it's shape
    This perfect shape
    So perfect in it's hate

    Love triangle
    Our means of escape




    Submitted on 2005-02-06 13:10:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh wow, i really liked this one - mostly becose i could not help myself thinking how greatly this would fit in some song with fiddles and soft guitar. The seemed "Chorus" part really catches the reader as well as the two last lines. Great job indeed.
    | Posted on 2005-02-06 00:00:00 | by Rainmaker | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one... as I do most of your stuff, this just like made me cry, I'm sorry. I can't help but think of a situation I was in like that. I hope I get to talk to you later, you're such a great person to talk to. I'm glad I found you. my favorite part was:

    I wish I was the only one in love
    but I'm not the only one in love...

    that discribes me.
    Wisdom
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]


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