Description: hmmm...well this one is pretty self-explanatory.
not complete yet...because yeah I suck at punctuation but I like the feel...haha...yep I'm a giddy school girl ;)
Do what you will...
I’m fingering fire
with palms of clay
swaying to the mold
his golden form…
Breathless and beautiful
Speechless and bold
Curled and captivated
I reach the threshold
of his eyes…
where sighs slip
sculpted and gripped
tripping over each other
from lovers lips.
and all I can do is smile
he fits so well
hard to tell
what shape
this sculpture will take
for he is solidly
chiseled in me.
This piece just drips of the passion that permeates the artist, both within the piece and the artist that formed the words of the piece. Creation of beauty from nothing is its own reward, now isn't it?
Like angels in the sky! Loved this peace and the photo was very beautiful! Your words flow like wine and your eyes see just the right thing.
Great write.
Kelley Frost
you know you could write a book full of passion your usage of words knocks my words right out of the ball park batta batta swing girl you have a gift in you and its writes like this one that goes to show.Your not always longing these days nope passion has entered the building and the fire is nice and warm.love you kiddo and i love this piece.
haha not much else to say that hasnt already been said, i really love this piece, and the picture works perfectly for it, its smooth, like you can almost feel the polished clay between your fingers. fantastic piece, thats all there is:)
i love the originality of your images in this poem! 'fingering fire with palms of clay' is a great metaphor to start this with as it is so thought-provoking and powerful. I also like how you choose words for how they look and sound; for example the words 'slip, gripped, tripping, lips' buried in the last few lines of the first verse, and your use of alliteration, really help make this poem flow beautifully. xxx
Mmmm. SEX! Woohoo! Haha ok, now that I've got that outta my system...
"Breathless and beautiful Speechless and bold"
Woohoo! Good adjective usage, not rhetorical but adds alot to the already intense moments and experience here. It's good for clarity and adds a bit of stability in the midst of the "situation" details.
"where sighs slip sculpted and gripped tripping over each other with lips of lovers." Again, really really good! The idea of your moans slipping and stumbling out... SO GOOD. Well, that's how it is, isn't it?! You just can't help yourself.
I also love the end in the brackets. Like an afterthought, almost a reflection on the memory. Ahh, I know that this could be metaphorical, but dammit, I hope it's just about sex! I'm adding it to my faves... definitely my favorite "sex" piece so far, as far as I can remember! Not raunchy, but not all gussied up either. I love it. Teeee-riffic!
I really enjoyed reading this peice ...It gives me something to smile about !....I love the images and feelings you created in that ....It was sensual and beautiful ...without being too heavy on the emotions Good job
ya see kellie, it's poems like these that made me add you to my stalker list... i've read all the work you've submitted fer the past few months and lemme tell ya, i've loved them all... though i'm usually too lazt to comment... sorry ... this piece, it was amazing how it flowed, it didn't exactly rhyme but it did i dunno how to explain it... you but the masterful artestry of generations in your work and yet you're still sooooo young... and don't disagree with me on that one cause ya are... What more can i say... fantastic, wonderful, poetiful... tis a true work of art i'm glad you let me read it... take care and i really do hope to hear from you again... Adios! Travis
the thing i enjoyed most in this piece was your use of alliteration. it permeates this poetic piece poignantly and powerfully (sorry, couldn't resist!). something that concers me is the repercussions of the imagery you have chosen to represent your "giddy"ness, possibly even what you may consider to be love: sculpture. when i think of sculptures i think of 2 prevelant characteristics; they are either hollow, or they have a tendency to break. i'm wondering if you used this image with these things in mind. still, it is a very well written piece.
very sexy... this reminded me of the scene in Ghost where he's sitting behind her at the potter's wheel... sensual and passionate. i like it because it doesn't spell everything out and leaves the imagination to fire up itself! well done!
You my friend need to be published somewhere. I feel guilty reading such gripping material comletely free of charge.
I reach the threshold of his eyes… where sighs slip sculpted and gripped This is the familiar moment in most of your work when my jaw drops in amazement of the refreshing way you crystalize an image with your word choice. I know you propbably think I am just sweet to you all the time, but dont get it twisted, I only speak the truth as I see it.
Submission Name: Sculpted Gold
... this piece, it was amazing how it flowed, it didn't exactly rhyme but it did 
i dunno how to explain it... you but the masterful artestry of generations in your work and yet you're still sooooo young... and don't disagree with me on that one cause ya are... What more can i say... fantastic, wonderful, poetiful... tis a true work of art 
i'm glad you let me read it... take care and i really do hope to hear from you again... Adios! Travis