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    dots Submission Name: When I was your frienddots
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    Author: Selene
    ASL Info:    21/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 150/165/57
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1013
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    Description:
       Just a vent, but i liked the jab enough at the end that i had to put it online.


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    dotsWhen I was your frienddots
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    When I was
    feeling overwhelmed,
    I thought that you
    my oldest friend,
    would be right their
    I should have known,
    that since youre perfect
    you wouldn't care.




    Submitted on 2005-02-07 15:47:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Could betrayal have even been so displayed in such a passionate way.

    The raw display of emotions that are conveyed in this peice are awe inspiring .

    That is why I like this poem.
    | Posted on 2005-03-20 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
      i know were not susposed to say "wow i can realate" but damnit it i can. i like the way its written too, its short and sweet and has a damn good right hook
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by lilghostyme | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the seemingly depreciated tone this poem takes. to tell you the truth, it is a description of how my best friend feels about me. What she seems to not realize is that she is so amazing, I'm working my hardest to try to keep up with her. She is the person I try to model myself after, because while i may be able to endure pain, both emotional and physical, I'm not much more. She is the perfect one.
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]


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