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    dots Submission Name: a child's lovedots
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    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsa child's lovedots
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    i am what you fear,
    the guilty conscious
    that screams in your ear.
    i am what you love,
    an innocent child
    pure as a dove.
    i am a mistake,
    the result of a party and some
    poor choices you decided to make.
    i am the star of your eye,
    as you rock me to sleep
    and sing me a lullaby.
    i am the anger that surfaces from time to time,
    but no matter how hard you try,
    to hate me would be a crime.
    i am your happiness,
    you quietly whisper, 'i have no regrets',
    and you seal this promise with a kiss.




    Submitted on 2005-02-07 17:49:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a nice poem, I like all of the decriptions you put into this peace. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by Celestial Star | [ Reply to This ]


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