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    dots Submission Name: i love youdots
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    Author: shattered_dream
    ASL Info:    19/Female/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 144/201/65
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 882
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 774



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    dotsi love youdots
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    i start to listen as you say
    "my heart breaks everyday
    as i see you a little less
    all the time i've waited to express"
    i wait as he stares at my lips
    then every inch of my hair down to my tips
    i twirl my hair waiting
    and now hating
    this silence that passes
    watching people go to their classes
    "i love you" escapes from his lips
    my hand goes to my mouth... as a tear slips
    from my eye to my cheek
    i cannot even speak
    as he lifts my head twards his
    and all he does is
    press his lips against mine
    and as our tongues intertwine
    i see that he and i need to go
    i tell him so he will know.
    "i love you too"




    Submitted on 2005-02-07 17:58:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      right I just commented on one of your other poems which i tought was really good,but this one is so much better i really like this poem alot i think its well writen and and really lets you feel what the auther is feeling.it's raw and so sweet.I think it is one a my favorites,i can relate to it am im sure alot more people will and enjoy it as much as i did.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by korn9426 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem. I love the length of the rhyme and think it has a nice flow to it. Unfortunately I can't relate at all right now...my heart has just been broken ...so I'm kind of jealous, but happy for you...
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by Jann | [ Reply to This ]


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