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    dots Submission Name: what is lovedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       this is a rough draft
    please comment
    i don't care if it is a bad comment.


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    dotswhat is lovedots
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    love
    Is there such a thing.
    Is it just a word

    There might not be a true love for every one
    but there always one hating you.

    so much hatred in this world
    no one can get along

    I still want to know what is love
    I know what love isn't
    love isn't
    when a parent
    picks her lover over
    her first son.
    All i can say i deal with a ton
    i guess i'm not your son
    why not agree and move on

    I still want to know what love is
    Is it when your girl friend wants to have sex
    or is it when some one cares about you
    and is there when you need it
    instead of that knife waiting there for me to end this.
    Then may be some one will love me.




    Submitted on 2005-02-07 18:01:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very neat. I like it. I too have thought about that very same question, even written a paper on the topic (if you would like to read it send me a PM). As far as it being a rough draft it could use a little proof reading...i only saw a couple of little mistakes in it though, nothing big. When you get the final draft done please post it, I'm eager to see the end product. It looks promising.
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by Silencer | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is deep. I've often pondered the same question - "What is love?"...And I still have come to no conclusion at all, so i can definately relate. Whenever my parents say " I love you "... I mumble back "You too." and I think to myself - honestly what am i saying?? Anyway, this is very good for a rough draft - good thoughts are definately expressed. Maybe make it flow just a little more, you know? A little more rythm and rhyme, but over all it's good.
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by Jann | [ Reply to This ]


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