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    dots Submission Name: Close Your Eyesdots
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    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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       I know some of the parts of this are kinda off, so any advice is appreciated!!! XOXO


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    dotsClose Your Eyesdots
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    Close your eyes and be silent for once.
    Enjoy the fact that everything's gone.
    Accept the fact that nothing will ever be the same, that this will sting, that nothing will ever look as beautiful as it does when it's this far away.
    Stand on a chair, look me in the eyes, and tell me it actually happened.
    Put you hand in a cage and tell me you never lied.
    Tell me you never meant to run away.
    Tell me you never meant to seem so distant.
    Even when no one's around to listen, what does it seem so lonesome around here these days?
    You closed my window and suffocated my birds.
    When the world makes no sense, who am I to make sense of it?
    Just to see your name in the caller ID put stars in my eyes and brightened up my day...
    Even if I never picked up the phone.
    You're like the thin nail polish I bought for a dollar.
    One coat is never enough.
    As for the rest of the world:
    I've had enough of them.
    A plague; never enough to sweep away the riches of the land completely.
    The non-sense that will come out of your mouth will make more sense than anything you've ever said.
    Kissed the last of the red goodbye and suddenly everything will come together to form another natural disaster.
    Our worlds will collide in beautiful yet devastating design.
    To wear a crooked smile on your face would swallow me whole in a heart-beat.
    The thinnest air is up in the mountains where we can barely breathe.
    Yet we prefer it to the city's plains.
    So close you eyes and be silent for once...
    And enjoy the fact that everything's gone.




    Submitted on 2005-02-08 09:54:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a few parts were confusing but overall it's very beautiful and honest prose. the cage part confused me too and I was not sure what you were referring to with 'one coat is never enough' in regards to the person you're addressing. perhaps he wears more than one? anyway, it was still very effective and I thouroughly enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      not too bad, I like it.
    got anymore?
    d d d d d d d d d d dd d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d d
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved how you compared him to a coat of nail polish I can't even say how much i liked those few lines! I was confused with the line put your hand in a bird cage.
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      Yea i was pretty confused through some of it. Its sounds like your talking about a single person...then the world...then a person? maybe a bird? haha jk about the bird. Anyways...other then that i like it. I think if you gave a little better description on what it is about then maybe people could understand it alittle better.
    DaN
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by Antigravity | [ Reply to This ]


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